1. REWRITING AND REORGANIZATION: I rewrote my entire first page . I changed the introduction so that it better engages the reader and then I rewrote my "what I already knew..." section and provided background information more concisely. I also added a comment at the end of my paper that I thought would remind the reader of my initial comment about a teacher "losing her mind." I added a conclusion paragraph where I provided my final thoughts about each of my sources, how they addressed my original questions and how I finally feel about my initial hesitation for teaching.
2. FORMATTING: I changed my source documentation to APA format and added more sources that I used.
3. FLUENCY: I tried to plant in better transitional sentences between paragraphs and main ideas. Then I included a preview paragraph in my introduction which informed what sources I would be talking about later in the paper. It was also used in my conclusion.
No comments:
Post a Comment